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Longish Stories

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    Nicko

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    Hello, My name is Scarb, what you are about to read is a true account of what I experienced some weeks ago...

    It was dusk as I approached the steps of the church. I had decided to go there to be at one with myself. Not somewhere I would normally go, but you know when you are having a really bad day and you are looking to find the point of it all. Well, anyway as I reached the steps, there was a man hanging around,looked like he was waiting to go in. I was hoping to have the place to myself, so I decided to walk round the block, willing him to buggar off by the time I got. Only, when I returned 20 minutes later, there he was laying on the ground, obviously, not at all well. I shook him, asking him if he was all right. He grabbed hold of my arm and tried to lift his head up indicating with his eyes toward a woman standing outside a house on the other side of the street. She looked weird, just staring like a idiot I looked at her, then back at the man...

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    Pippa666

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    Looks vy good so far Nicko, but what happens next, whats wrong with the man ? and whats the womans secret ?

    More pls :)
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    Nicko

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    Are you sure you nerves can stand it Pip...Glad of your opinion..Next episode coming soon..Be afraid..be very afraid :evil:
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    Pippa666

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    I think I can just abt cope..........next episode pls :)
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    Nicko

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    ...he had let go of my arm, head flat on the floor, eyes and mouth wide open.'What!' I said to him.He didnt move, I shook him, 'Hello, can you hear me?' I looked in the direction of the woman. She was beckening me to go to her, beckening and turning toward the door of the house she was standing outside. I couldnt see her face. It was dark now, there was one of those new type of street lights on the corner, about 20 metres away but it was still shining orange...hadnt come on properly yet.
    Knelt beside the man, I started to get to my feet, jeez.. he grabbed my arm again and I fell to my knees. Just as quick he let go, he gave an almighy croak and was still. Dead, most definately? All I could was to call an ambulance. I looked to the woman for help, she'd gone. I dialled 999 on my mobile, the operator said the hospital was closed and put the phone down on me. I tried again..no reply..again, no reply I ran to the nearest phone box, thought my mobile may have been out of order, at first I thought the phone had been vandalized but it hadnt. I pressed 999 a womans voice said 'I told you you arsehole the hospital is closed' before I could answer she said 'Why didnt you come when I waved to you'. Shit,I thought I was cracking up. I ran back towards the man. Strange, as I ran, I thought of the croaking noise the guy made, and wondered if thats how that saying came about. When I reached the church the guy had gone. I looked all around, not a soul in sight (no pun intended). I looked across to the house. There she was, the woman, staring out of the upstairs window and...beckening. I couldnt make any sense of it all. I took a deep breath, shaking my head, I glanced down at the floor and there, laying just by the gatepost was a small object the size of a bar of soap. I stooped to look closer, the pavement started moving like the waves of the sea. Everything started to fade away. No no no I cant be dying...I was falling towards the object, the pavement was still rocking. My strength was leaving me...and then the object it was...

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    Maljonic

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    great stuff! Watch out for little typos though; 'All I could do was call an ambulance.' makes more sense. Having said that, seeing as the guy is speaking he can say anything he wants; so you might want to leave as it is if it's some kind of character flaw.
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    Nicko

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    What do you mean?'
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    a thing that had a voice it said...( This happened you know) Dont see that woman at the house, dont even look at her...I looked...and then she kept on beckening me..
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    I was going to go towards the house, and then a men was there, right in front of me. He said 'Dont bother going to the house'I asked him 'why,because there was a man here and I think he is very ill.' The man told me to go home and forget what I had seen. At this stage I thought 'Better I go' but then I looked at the house and the woman was there, holding her hand open to me, seemed like she was begging me t o go to her. What should I do...Foolish yes, I know, but I followed her, in to the house. When I got inside I couldnt believe my eyes, there right in front of me was the most horrendous sight I had ever seen. Strange as it may seem I remained composed. I asked the womam 'What is this?' she smiled at me and started to talk. I couldnt understand what she was saying. Lots of people were there. Seemed like they had come from nowhere, they were all making funny noises. Lord have mercy, what should I do? What about the bodies/people that were there and then...

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    Maljonic

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    'I was going to go towards the house, and then a men was there'
    I was going to go towards the house, and then a man was there...

    That's the kind of thing I mean, but because it's written in the first person. I.e. someone is speaking to the reader, they can say anything they want; Scarb could be a foreigner or something, part of his character flaw...
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    Im telling it like it is...forget the grameeeer, if you can Mr Perfection..This is wot appen to me..me is lucky to be able to tell u dis yano...not a dream ..real ting..hear me now!!!


    Bet Pippa wouldnt appear so percipient... blaaaaa!!!
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    Just cottoned on to what youre saying....but it is so scary, you will see as my story unfolds..I just get carried away..just writing it as it come to my brain..sorry if it offend you.I will try harder to get it right. Sorry everybody that read my story...Love and niceness ...Jah be with you xxx
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    Tis a very good story so far Nicko & I look forward to reading more. I think Mal is just trying to help u though so .......Chill out !!!! <g>
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    Ya right Pip..Point taken!...Cheers Mal, appreciate your comments! :D
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    Maljonic

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    Thanks and your welcome; more story please;)
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    a young woman came up to me . She was dressed in a nurses uniform. For a split second I thought she was a kissagram, crazy I know, but isnt it funny how our minds work.Anyway, she looked at me like she knew me. She smiled and asked if I had come to deliver or collect. I thought deliver or collect what? Then it dawned on me.. the cats. Of course I havent told you yet. In the front room of the house was a settee, an arm chair, a table and other bits of furniture which I couldnt make out. Sloped all over the furniture were about 500 dead cats.Least I thought they were dead. Some of them had limbs missing, some were really skinny with fur missing, others had their eyes hanging out. Strange as it may seem, there was no blood and no deathly smells as one would expect at such an horrendous scene. All the people that were there were talking to eachother. They seemed to be speaking English, but I couldnt mame out what they were saying. They appeared to be picking up various cats and putting them down again. The room was pretty dark, the light was on, for what good it was doing..probably about a 10 watt light bulb..if there is such a thing.
    The kissagram repeated herself. I looked at her straight in the eye, searching for a clue to this insane place I was in and I asked her 'What the hell is going on here, what is this place, have I entered a fu***** mad house'? She looked straight past me. I turned to see what she was looking at. There, standing on the stairs in the hall was that woman again. She opened her hand revealing something that looked familiar. It was that object..the one were.. the one I saw near the church yard..Now I was falling, everything was fading away...No, there it was again. ...that feeling

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    Maljonic

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    ooo, getting a bit Strange now.....
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    Nicko

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    Does that mean you dont like it Mal? :?
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    Maljonic

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    no it doesn't mean that; it means, ooo getting a bit Strange now....
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    ooooo ooooo what happened next ????

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